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From: "Brutzman, Don" <brutzman@nps.edu>
Date: Sat, 2 Nov 2024 09:07:32 -0700
Subject: [PATCH] editorial updates

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-# X3D Models of U.S. Naval Academy Campus by Naval Support Activity Annapolis (NSAA)
+# X3D Models of U.S. Naval Academy (USNA) Campus 
 
-*Summary*.  Versar, CEG, and a small dynamic team of partners provide NSA Annapolis(NSAA) 
+*Summary*.  A high-fidelity model of the USNA campus was commissioned that distilled robot-collected scan data for publication as composable X3D graphics models.  
+The project goal was to better understand and communicate 
+Courses of Actions (COAs) that the installation might need to implement in order to be more resilient for climate and coastal change.
+
+Creating X3D graphics models for 3D Virtual Environment (3DVE) technologies, tools, data and visualization supported development of a comprehensive 
+[USNA Installation Resiliency Plan]
+(https://www.usna.edu/NewsCenter/2023/04/USNA,_NSAA_RELEASE_INSTALLATION_RESILIENCY_PLAN.php) in 2022.
+This work was supervised by Naval Support Activity Annapolis (NSAA).  Commercial contractors Versar, CEG, and a small dynamic team of partners provided NSA Annapolis (NSAA),
 U.S. Naval Academy (USNA) NAVFAC and Commander of Naval Installation Command (CNIC)
-with the 3D Virtual Environment (3DVE) technologies, tools, data and 
-visualization platform to better understand and communicate specific Courses of Actions (COAs) 
-that the installation might need to implement in order to be more resilient for 
-climate and coastal change.
 
 Demonstration of interest:
 [2022 Site Exploration Preview video](NSAA_USNA_3D_Viewer_Demonstration_Video_022522_v5.mp4) and
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 <!-- ![AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png "USNA Annapolis Maryland, 3D Virtual Environment walkthrough video"](AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png) -->
 
-[![AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png "USNA Annapolis Maryland, 3D Virtual Environment walkthrough video"](AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png)](https://savage.nps.edu/videos/Spiders3D/Annapolis_04_02_2021_.mp4)
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+[![AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png "USNA Annapolis Maryland, 3D Virtual Environment walkthrough preiminary video, 2021"](AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png)](https://savage.nps.edu/videos/Spiders3D/Annapolis_04_02_2021_.mp4)
 
-[This video](https://savage.nps.edu/videos/Spiders3D/Annapolis_04_02_2021_.mp4)
+A [preliminary walkthrough video](NSAA_USNA_3D_Viewer_Demonstration_Video_022522_v5.mp4)
+([screenshot](AnnapolisCampusSplash_04_02_2021.png))
 was briefed at ACM SIGGRAPH 2021 conference in Cartographic Birds of a Feather (BOF) session on Monday 9 August 2021.  Note that the video was recorded from a Web browser, all models and metadata 
 are following the open international data standard X3D.
 
 ## Overview
 
-This effort resulted in the first simple digital twin of a Navy and Marine Corps installation. This simple model of both natural and built environments in 3DVE will assist with improving the 
+This effort produced an excellent 3D presentation of a Navy and Marine Corps installation. This simple model of both natural and built environments in 3DVE will assist with improving the 
 pace of technical, geospatial-based collaboration, and decision support for this and 
 future planning efforts on the installation.  
 
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